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[454697819]

Had a go at creating a card to drop into farmers etc around my neck of the woods.

 

Gonna put into production tomorrow.

 

Any final comments appreciated...

 

 

 

 

Many thanks

 

Alex

Edited March 24, 2010 by 454697819

[tomhw100]

i think they look quite professional mate! well done!

[Billy.]

Had a go at creating a card to drop into farmers etc around my neck of the woods.

 

Gonna put into production tomorrow.

 

Any final comments appreciated...Phone numbers are incorrect at time of posting on internet.

 

 

 

 

Many thanks

 

Alex

 

 

Your use Of proper Nouns is rather Strange. I think you Need To rewrite It So it is Grammatically correct.

 

Other than that, not bad

Edited March 24, 2010 by harfordwmj

[Billy.]

Oh and I would seriously blur out your personal info. You don't want an anti getting hold of all that info

[PAULT]

these are not bad atall

Edited March 24, 2010 by PAULT

[454697819]

Your use Of proper Nouns is rather Strange. I think you Need To rewrite It So it is Grammatically correct.

 

Other than that, not bad

 

Don't mean to be pedantic but as a Dyslexic I have no idea what you mean,

 

please point me in the write direction and ill change it.

 

Cheers

 

Alex

 

Info Is Incorrect.. or at least mostly, its not text format so cant be swiped by robots.

 

Thanks for the comments.

[Cookiemonsterandmerlin.]

The use of cards sounds great and I dont want to knock yours as it looks good.

 

But I feel they have only a real use for contact once you have gained permmission and trust of the landowner from face to face contact.

 

Going back years was usefull but with ever farmer have a mobile phone once you have made contacted all my farmer have my number on there mobile for 24/7 contact.

 

I dont want to to put you off but are you paying to have them printed and if so how many etc.

 

Regards OTH

[Billy.]

Don't mean to be pedantic but as a Dyslexic I have no idea what you mean,

 

please point me in the write direction and ill change it.

 

Cheers

 

Alex

 

Info Is Incorrect.. or at least mostly, its not text format so cant be swiped by robots.

 

Thanks for the comments.

 

It's not internet bots you need to worry about, it's those who are anti hunting. Any slither of personal information and you're potentially leading them to you. The extremists do some horrible things, so don't just think a nasty text will come your way.

 

A proper noun is something like 'William', 'England' or 'London' A word which requires a capital letter at the front. "Totally Free Service to land Owners" is wrong. I see what you're getting at, so why not change it to "Totally Free Service to Land Owners" which would be correct if it were a heading.

 

The 'to' is lower-case because it is not an 'infinitive' which is a 'to' written before a verb. For example, 'to cry'.

 

The other sentence to change to keep it in line is "Controlled Through the use of Firearms and Air guns" which would be

 

"Controlled Through the Use of Firearms and Air Guns"

 

That is the way it should be written as a heading, which is your intention.

 

Your postcode also needs a space between the first 3 digits and the last.

 

'Pigeon, Rabbit & Vermin' is using the same thing twice, as rabbits and pigeon are vermin anyway. I would go for the funnier approach:

 

"Rabbits Rumbled, Pigeons Purged, Foxes Foiled & Squirrels Slain"

Edited March 24, 2010 by harfordwmj

[454697819]

It's not internet bots you need to worry about, it's those who are anti hunting. Any slither of personal information and you're potentially leading them to you. The extremists do some horrible things, so don't just think a nasty text will come your way.

 

A proper noun is something like 'William', 'England' or 'London' A word which requires a capital letter at the front. "Totally Free Service to land Owners" is wrong. I see what you're getting at, so why not change it to "Totally Free Service to Land Owners" which would be correct if it were a heading.

 

The 'to' is lower-case because it is not an 'infinitive' which is a 'to' written before a verb. For example, 'to cry'.

 

The other sentence to change to keep it in line is "Controlled Through the use of Firearms and Air guns" which would be

 

"Controlled Through the Use of Firearms and Air Guns"

 

That is the way it should be written as a heading, which is your intention.

 

Your postcode also needs a space between the first 3 digits and the last.

 

'Pigeon, Rabbit & Vermin' is using the same thing twice, as rabbits and pigeon are vermin anyway. I would go for the funnier approach:

 

"Rabbits Rumbled, Pigeons Purged, Foxes Foiled & Squirrels Slain"

 

 

Thanks very much for the help, Ill get the Grammar correct and get em on order, the funnier version is great but sounds a bit too much like a tag line for a business. postcode only has two numbers though :-)

 

Over the hill - The cards will be used once face to face contact is established,

 

rather than either of us fumbling around for a scrap of paper etc I can just hand one of these over and it can go through the wash with there overalls lol

[Shuck.]

Oh and I would seriously blur out your personal info. You don't want an anti getting hold of all that info

 

+1 blur out your info Alex, this is an open forum, readable by anyone, for or against shooting sports.

 

Don't mean to be pedantic but as a Dyslexic I have no idea what you mean,

 

please point me in the write direction and ill change it.

 

Cheers

 

Alex

 

Info Is Incorrect.. or at least mostly, its not text format so cant be swiped by robots.

 

Thanks for the comments.

 

He means that you have randomly capitalised letters all over the place.

On the firont pic, change to "Totally free service to land owners".

Back pic, "Controlled through the use of firearms and airguns

No poison or traps used"

[454697819]

now blured

 

if harfordwmj can just edit his quote that would be great.

 

Cheers again for comments

 

Alex

[Billy.]

now blured

 

if harfordwmj can just edit his quote that would be great.

 

Cheers again for comments

 

Alex

 

Sorry! It didn't even cross my mind...! :o

 

All done

[John_R]

I see what you're getting at, so why not change it to "Totally Free Service to Land Owners" which would be correct if it were a heading.

 

There is an argument that is not so much proper nouns as improper use of capitals. It might sound old fashioned, but in this situation I reckon the only capital letter you need is the one at the start of the line.

[Billy.]

There is an argument that is not so much proper nouns as improper use of capitals. It might sound old fashioned, but in this situation I reckon the only capital letter you need is the one at the start of the line.

 

The words, "Totally free service to land owners" is not a sentence, so it should not be treated as one. There's no verb in that collection of words, so it isn't a sentence.

 

The best way to write it so it's grammatically correct is to have it as a title. Therefore it should contain capital letters on all nouns, verbs, subordinate conjunctions and adverbs.

 

Sorry if that comes across angry, I seriously don't mean to...!

[454697819]

The words, "Totally free service to land owners" is not a sentence, so it should not be treated as one. There's no verb in that collection of words, so it isn't a sentence.

 

The best way to write it so it's grammatically correct is to have it as a title. Therefore it should contain capital letters on all nouns, verbs, subordinate conjunctions and adverbs.

 

Sorry if that comes across angry, I seriously don't mean to...!

 

Not at all

 

Id rather get basic things right,

 

I am not using dyslexia as an excuse, its genuine..

 

Im certified to boot lol.

 

mind you i think were all certified in one form or another :o

[John_R]

That makes sense. In any case, the overall design of the card is pleasing to look at.

[ST3V3]

are they off vista print if so dont go for the cheapest delivery option as they will take about a month to arrive

ok if your not in a rush for them

[Billy.]

Careful with Vista, as the image above will not be the same as they arrive. If you want the writing the same way up on both sides, you have to make one image upside down.

 

I found out the hard way about 2 weeks ago and it ruined the design of my cards. However, I called up Vista and they sent me out another 500 for free, as apparently it's a known issue that the customers aren't made aware of.

 

So if you don't mind the first batch being wrong, you can either get 1000 for the price of 500 or whatever amount you're buying, doubled for free.

 

Simples

[454697819]

Careful with Vista, as the image above will not be the same as they arrive. If you want the writing the same way up on both sides, you have to make one image upside down.

 

I found out the hard way about 2 weeks ago and it ruined the design of my cards. However, I called up Vista and they sent me out another 500 for free, as apparently it's a known issue that the customers aren't made aware of.

 

So if you don't mind the first batch being wrong, you can either get 1000 for the price of 500 or whatever amount you're buying, doubled for free.

 

Simples

 

Cheers for the heads up, they are from VP, but I am using their online software... ill see if I can contact them before I order.

 

Thanks

 

Alex

[sambu13]

The words, "Totally free service to land owners" is not a sentence, so it should not be treated as one. There's no verb in that collection of words, so it isn't a sentence.

 

The best way to write it so it's grammatically correct is to have it as a title. Therefore it should contain capital letters on all nouns, verbs, subordinate conjunctions and adverbs.

 

Sorry if that comes across angry, I seriously don't mean to...!

 

 

Isn't 'service' a verb?

 

Look good anyhoo

[John_R]

"Service" is a noun in this context. However, it is not a proper noun as suggested by Harford, it is simply a key word in a title, and in that regard he is correct that it should be capitalised.

Edited March 25, 2010 by john_r

[454697819]

Thanks for the comments, got my wife who is supper ace clever to go though it and change it, looks good.

 

Just bough them on vp and the sneaky ******* but the quants up to 500 without me noticing so I ordered 500 not the 250 i was after... ***

 

heres hoping they get them right.

 

Cheers

 

Alex

[starlight32]

Thanks for the comments, got my wife who is supper ace clever to go though it and change it, looks good.

 

Just bough them on vp and the sneaky ******* but the quants up to 500 without me noticing so I ordered 500 not the 250 i was after... ***

 

heres hoping they get them right.

 

Cheers

 

Alex

 

 

Before you go too far, business cards and shooting don't work too well around your way, for a start you are mainly within the large landowner territory, estates etc. You will find that in many instances whoever you leave the card with wont make it to the person who will deal with it and ultimately give the permission.

 

I am not saying do not use them, just use them in the right way. Establish a contact have a chat and then if you get to the phone details bit produce a card rather than fumbling about for a pen or asking a landowner to save it to his phone.It looks a whole lot better then.

 

To be honest several times I have had farmers whose land I shoot approach me with a business card or flyer that someone has dropped in and asking me if I know them. More often than not I don't and they just toss the card to the wind. This is not my choice as I dont give a monkeys who shoots their land but as I say thats how they work.

[454697819]

Before you go too far, business cards and shooting don't work too well around your way, for a start you are mainly within the large landowner territory, estates etc. You will find that in many instances whoever you leave the card with wont make it to the person who will deal with it and ultimately give the permission.

 

I am not saying do not use them, just use them in the right way. Establish a contact have a chat and then if you get to the phone details bit produce a card rather than fumbling about for a pen or asking a landowner to save it to his phone.It looks a whole lot better then.

 

To be honest several times I have had farmers whose land I shoot approach me with a business card or flyer that someone has dropped in and asking me if I know them. More often than not I don't and they just toss the card to the wind. This is not my choice as I dont give a monkeys who shoots their land but as I say thats how they work.

 

 

Thats the point of the card in my opinion, I wont be posting it willy nilly though letter boxes, it is more that I can go knock and speak to them, then if they say maybe I can leave a card.

 

I live in a small village and I already know of both the big farmers, so going to wait untill these are here, then pop round and say Hi...

 

Cheers for the advice though

 

Out of interest, you don't shoot around Ipswich way do you?

Edited March 26, 2010 by 454697819

[MM]

Your use Of proper Nouns is rather Strange. I think you Need To rewrite It So it is Grammatically correct.

Other than that, not bad

 

 

 

Most farmers cant say proper Nouns, never mind pick up on its use.